In this activity I had to finish off the rest of the story with 8-10 sentences.One day you are walking along the deck of the ship when you hear a loud bang. You start to run as you see smoke coming from the far end of the ship. You run towards the room where your patients are waiting to receive treatment from the doctor. Just as you arrive at the door to their room you hear another loud bang and you…
One day you are walking along the deck of the ship when you hear a loud bang. You start to run as you see smoke coming from the far end of the ship. You run towards the room where your patients are waiting to receive treatment from the doctor. Just as you arrive at the door to their room you hear another loud bang and you turn around to see a huge hole in the side of the ship. You open the door and see the injured patients lying on the floor in pain. You try to calm down the nurses that are screaming at the top of their lungs. The air starts to get thicker and it gets harder to breathe. You and your fellow nurses trying help as much people as you can off the ship. Unfortunately there are no more safety rafts and you are clueless of what to do. The ship starts to slowly sink into the water. The only thing that comes to mind is to jump off the ship. You got to the edge of the ship and leap off. Your life flashes through your eyes as the ship explodes behind you. Fortunately you swim safely to shore.
One day you are walking along the deck of the ship when you hear a loud bang. You start to run as you see smoke coming from the far end of the ship. You run towards the room where your patients are waiting to receive treatment from the doctor. Just as you arrive at the door to their room you hear another loud bang and you turn around to see a huge hole in the side of the ship. You open the door and see the injured patients lying on the floor in pain. You try to calm down the nurses that are screaming at the top of their lungs. The air starts to get thicker and it gets harder to breathe. You and your fellow nurses trying help as much people as you can off the ship. Unfortunately there are no more safety rafts and you are clueless of what to do. The ship starts to slowly sink into the water. The only thing that comes to mind is to jump off the ship. You got to the edge of the ship and leap off. Your life flashes through your eyes as the ship explodes behind you. Fortunately you swim safely to shore.
Hi Tiava,
ReplyDeleteMe again!
You did a good job in here! You continuation of the story does makes sense and seems like a very reasonable finish for it. However, a part of me wished that you did some heroic act and manage to save the boat and/or the patients! :0)
For the future consider to add a picture to support you written. In this case a black & white picture of an old Red Cross ship or a nurse back on these days would create a visual appealing to your post .
Keep up the good work!
Kia kaha,
Patricia
Hello Tiava
ReplyDeleteGreat job on completing this summer learning journey activity. Your story is awesome. Just a future reference for next time, remember to make your writing a little bit bigger so that it is easier to read. Keep up the excellent work Tiava!
Daniel